Just a Backbeat.

I really enjoy the melody you have going. A good way to make a minor tone sound pleasant. Gets some lyrics down then maybe I can give you a ten, but a background beat is just classified as instrumental. Just because you add acoustic drum samples doesn't really classify it as hip-hop. The beat that you have composed would fall into the category of old school hip-hop anyway. Keep writing my man. I like your instrumental composing.

HOE

Yo hoe!!!! Its good but stop using fl studio default loops. Get some of your own. Four count turn to the rear!!! Haaaa haaaa rrrr cccchhhh. Ur gay.

Timing

Overall you did a great job remaking this song. The vocals weren't really in time with the instruments at one point. I'd give it a ten if you took the time to fix that.